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Dear all, this is a great starting point for a paper. I mean: it is ALMOST “good enough” for a conference paper, but needs substantive work for consideration by a journal. In any case, it is impressive how quickly you managed to put this together, so: my congrats!
It bonds well for our group <3 </div>
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Now, I was not feeling very well today, and I only managed to get to page 13 (until but excluding the Findings). I will resume tomorrow early morning. </div>
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In the meantime:</div>
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Fundamental points needing amendment:</div>
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<div dir="ltr" role="presentation" style="line-height: 1.5;">Nature of the case studies and of the paper more in general. This is not an empirical paper, but conceptual; case studies are (it seems to be) illustrative rather than full-fledged empirical accounts
(although there is some empirical analysis). I think this needs to be clarified in the abstract and in the introduction of the paper. No need to be defensive here, but to pre-empt reviewer concerns without overpromising. More importantly,
<span style="font-size: 16px; background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255);">from a social science perspective, you need to explain "what is a case a case of".. and why you can compare across tech families and across "country" case (with one being a supranational entity,
actually). I can suggest some language here as a quick fix… </span></div>
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<div dir="ltr" role="presentation" style="line-height: 1.5;">CDS and interdisciplinarity. I don’t think you only draw on critical data studies. You take from many more fields. Rephrase. This is a quick fix</div>
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<p dir="ltr" role="presentation" style="line-height: 1.5; margin: 0px;"><span style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255);">Definition of infrastructural inequality. What do you mean by “infrastructure”? See my comments on page 3 and page 9. Is infrastructure
… only “within” data infrastructure or also within institutional arrangements? I think the second” please specify and if you can clarify the relation between the two “</span><span style="font-size: 12pt; background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255);">levels”.</span></p>
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<div dir="ltr" role="presentation" style="line-height: 1.5; margin: 0px;"><span style="font-size: 16px;">Section “Infrastructure inequalities</span>”<span style="font-size: 16px;">: I propose a slightly adjusted definition, and a restricting of the section
to give more prominence to your contribution. See whether you like it. </span></div>
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More general points that can be fixed for a subsequent iteration of the paper:</div>
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<div dir="ltr" role="presentation">[structural] In general, it is good to signal the structure in a section: e.g., instead of a list of “problems” associated with regulatory data infrastructure, which risks coming across as a “soup”, enumerate the problems
you are subsequently describing. It helps following the argument. </div>
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<div dir="ltr" role="presentation">There is a potential tension in the “geography” of the case studies and literature. E.g. India and Europe, but then you rely on/evoke EU legislation (e.g., GDPR) and largely US literature (see Eubanks). If you want to know
what I mean, <a href="https://doi.org/10.1177/1527476419837739" data-outlook-id="d0016045-b83c-4768-b4d2-339110fe8194">
read this</a>. </div>
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More tomorrow. We can make it happen!</div>
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Stefi</div>
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